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The New Zealand lag has the Union Jack .

clearly that shows that were in the common wealth with England Australia ect,

that means we can entre in the common wealth games,some people might say that having the union jack on our flag dosen't matter it shows that we fought in the world wars with England, of course thats a big deal because it reminds us about the people who fought for our country.

This writing shows persuasive phrases 

For example i used clearly and of course.